The
Surprise in My Birthday
Everybody must have an unforgettable experience,
including me. The unforgettable experience happened
when I was in the fifth grade of elementary school in Malang. I went to school
with my friends on foot. The first lesson was natural science subject. The
teacher who taught the lesson was Mr. Suko. It was a special day. At first, Mr.
Suko asked me to imitate something. At the end of the lesson, I got a surprise
from Mr. Suko and my classmate. I did not realize that day was my birthday.
Mr. Suko came to the class and sat on the chair. Mr. Suko
asked me to come forward and I did it. When I was in front of the class, Mr.
Suko said “Linda, do you know how the butterfly flies?” and I answered “Yes, I
do sir”. And then Mr. Suko said “Imitate the butterfly flies, please”. In front
of the class, I flied like a butterfly. I flied around my classmate of about a
minute, and then Mr. Suko stopped my action. He asked me about the rainbow,
“Linda, do you know the rainbow?” and I answered “Yes, I do sir. The rainbow is
beautiful”. Mr Suko said, “You are right, so what will you do if you see the rainbow?
Show us your expression”. I pretended see the rainbow, I pointed the rainbow
and said “Wow, the rainbow is so beautiful. There are various colors”. After I
had finished for acting, Mr. Suko and my classmate gave me applause. I smiled
to my friends and I felt happy.
I still stayed in front of the class. Mr. Suko asked my
friend who sat beside me to come forward, her name is Debby. She come forward
and closed my eyes. I thought that Mr. Suko asked me to do something else, so I
stand up in front of the class conveniently. Two minutes later, I heard my
classmates left their chair and stood around me. I felt something that applied on
my face, it had fragrance but I did not know what kind of the thing was. I
thought that my face became a drawing book. Of about three minutes later, my
friends finished for applying something on my face. When I opened my eyes, I touched my face and I knew that something was lip stick. Oh God, I can not believe it. I surprised because my teacher and my classmate sang a birthday song for me.
After they had done for singing, my classmate gave me the gifts. It made me
happy and it was touching. I had not had held the birthday party before. I was
so happy because I had a teacher and classmate who were kind.J
I think "i can not belive it" must be " I could not belive it"
BalasHapusThat's true, Man. I forgot that can is Verb 1. Thanks :)
HapusHi linda,, It was your unforgettable moment for you right?
BalasHapusIt was so exciting..
I wanna correct your writing. you wrote" She come forward and closed my eyes".
"come" should be "came"
Yes, it was. It was exciting but embarrassing also. When I went home, there were some people looked at my face. I was so shy, Isti. :D
HapusThanks, Isti. "Came" is verb 2.
"I flied around my classmate of about a minute" it must be "I flied around my classmates for about a minute"
BalasHapusThanks Ike. Why I have to add "s" after "classmate"? Do you mind to tell me? :)
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BalasHapusOf about three minutes later,---> my suggestion is maybe you put "for", because before this sentence you put comma there.
BalasHapus"I knew that something was lip stick." better you replace "something" to be "it"
BalasHapuslip stick--->lipstick